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Topic : people do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When the society develops gradually and the life quality becomes higher, it is a universal desire of mankind to maintain a healthy lifestyle. It leads to a longer and happier life. We have many ideas or many ways to avoid the detrimental factors which affect your health. Staying healthy, in my opinion, means eating a well-balanced diet, getting regular exercise, and avoiding thing that are bad for your body and mind.

Firstly, a well-balanced diet is essential for good healthy. Nutrition plays a key role in maintaining good health and preventing many diseases. The modern life makes you feel comfortable and busy; therefore, you do not have enough time to care about your food and sometimes you need to take fast-food, which has a lot of hazardous factors such as high fat, high glucose, and little vegetable in order to save your time. However, good nutrition can be kept simple by following some basic rules : keeping fat intake love, eating food high in carbohydrates, avoid too much sugar, limiting salt, and eating a lot of fruit and vegetable.
Secondly, a healthy lifestyle is an active life. Physical fitness is necessary for good healthy. the life with lack of proper exercise can cause tiredness, poor general health, and obesity. Many recent scientific researches believe that walking 30 minutes per day is very good for health, especially your heart.
Finally, good health is acquired by saying "no" to bad habits which modern life brings to us. Smoking, drinking, overeating, and overworking are detrimental to your health. Balanced life is needed for everybody to keep healthy and you need to avoid situations that are constantly stressful.
In conclusion, people can take their lives and happiness into their own hands, and maintaining a healthy lifestyle is the first and simple step.

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When the society develops gradually and the life quality becomes higher, it is a universal desire of mankind to maintain a healthy lifestyle. It leads to a longer and happier life. We have many ideas or many ways to avoid the detrimental factors which affect your health. Staying healthy, in my opinion, means eating a well-balanced diet, getting regular exercise, and avoiding things that are bad for your body and mind.

Firstly, a well-balanced diet is essential for good healthy. Nutrition plays a key role in maintaining good health and preventing many diseases. The modern life makes you feel comfortable and busy; therefore, you do not have enough time to care about your food and sometimes you need to take fast-food, which has a lot of hazardous factors such as high fat, high glucose, and little vegetable in order to save your time. {<--- On the verge of being a run on. Split up your ideas.} However, good nutrition can be kept simple by following some basic rules : keeping fat intake love {Not sure what you mean here}, eating food high in carbohydrates, avoid too much sugar, limiting salt, and eating a lot of fruit and vegetables.


{ADDRESS THE PROMPT. You are off-topic. It is asking you. What you, specifically, do to be healthy. Not what people should do and not how. What do YOU do to stay healthy? Why? And what are some of those ways?}

Secondly, a healthy lifestyle is an active life. Physical fitness is necessary for good health. The life with lack of proper exercise can cause tiredness, poor general health, and obesity. {Life can cause fatigue, poor health and obesity? Life is a state of being.} Many recent scientific researches believe that walking 30 minutes per day is very good for health, especially your heart.

Finally, good health is acquired by saying "no" to bad habits which modern life brings to us. Smoking, drinking, overeating, and overworking are detrimental to your health. Balanced life is needed for everybody to keep healthy and you need to avoid situations that are constantly stressful.

In conclusion, people can take their lives and happiness into their own hands, and maintaining a healthy lifestyle is the first and simple step.

{REWRITE WITH your own personal efforts towards good health in mind!!}

In your opening statement you lead the reader to believe that you are going to talk about (Bold in green) and the topic of the essay is "What do you do for good health? ", so you should talk about you, not other people. Your English is good. I don't see you will have any problems.